Talk:Commander Brion/@comment-4789660-20120506164343

nice work man, but i would suggest telling the story in 3rd person, instead of 1st person, it makes it sound cooler. And write it as a 3rd person biography, first, tell a little about yourself (still in 3rd person), then start telling little stories about your "CWA life". Just look at mine for an example, or just add on to some of my stories where u were in them. :P