Talk:Arran Slarglide/@comment-17229870-20140407212409

Tip with writing: try to add compound words in your sentences that way they won't sound choppy and the reader will lose interests in the story with those. For example: Arran clicked start. The screen disappeared. He heard the clanking of droids.

See what I mean?

Add some compound words and I won't be the only one commenting on your page ;)