Talk:Vehhr Skirata/@comment-17229870-20140202122058

Little tip with writing: be carful when you repeat words.its fine to some times repeat it once but the reader will  get a little tired of seeing the same word over and over. Like for example: Nulls,your objective is to get the cadets to the gunships.lets up up you can succeed nulls! The nulls started to run toward the LAATs.

Just wanted to point that little detail out.other then that, great story.