Talk:Rage Ordo/@comment-5412494-20121204215654

I highly suggest removing references to the Mandalorian Guild...everyone is responsible for their actions - you are no exception. What's done is done. Let it go.

Strictly from the point of view of editing, I recommend printing your story and reading it out loud. There is quite a bit of repetition. You'll hear it and know it's time to get out the red pen to cross stuff out. When you clear your thoughts, you might also use paragraph breaks to start organizing your own story into separate timeline events.

Finally, each CWA character has their own 'canon' story. Please respect any other CWA character stories and squads by either NOT including them in your story, or asking their owners permission first and then providing them the opportunity to review/edit/delete what they don't like. To do otherwise is ori'dikutla...

-- Ferrigo Prosstang