Talk:Darth Kentun/@comment-5590887-20121013163927

Yeah... I edited a few things here in the beginning and helped it be a bit clearer.... But i just cant change the rest... Its disastrous... Youre putting 2 or more sentences together in ONE SENTENCE with no periods or commas and youre saying "I" and then youre saying "He"... So lets recap -

1 - Make it sound good (I had to change sentences because they just didnt make sense)

2 - Add punctuation (such as . and, and maybe some ... to make the sentences sound better)

3 - Add me as a The Box competitor and show me your updated skills after this little lesson :) chat me about it ...