Talk:Zeon Shadow/@comment-164.106.166.49-20120206190045

This is a start. Interesting plot but make sure to check up on your spelling and grammar. Also make sure to learn about the Star Wars timeline. When you talked about Viper fighting the Empire, 45 BBY would be wrong since that is much more before like the Clone Wars and the secession of the Separatists began. 19 BBY was when the Clone Wars ended and the Jedi Purge began. 18 BBY was about the time in my story when Ember invaded the Empire with his rebellion and it lasted for eh? six or seven years, so up to 12 BBY. I like what you chose for Viper's death though. Also it would be interesting if you could increase the plot of Zeon and also Viper. It would be cool to learn a lot more about both of them. Just tips lol. Otherwise, not bad. Keep up the good work. -Ember Marshall Commander of the 5th Sector Army and Blue Talon Legion Grand army of the Republic Number Alpha-13